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There is also a negative side to this corporation. Although it represents power it also represents obeisity. Peoples lives are affected because their health is a concern. it impacted large number of countries with the rise of obeisty. Although people know that Mcdonalds is unhealthy, they tend to eat it. Mcdonalds still make their money. And that's another symbol of power.

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There ia alos a negative side to this corporation. Although it represents power it also represents obeisity. The people who eat Mcdonalds are effected because their health is a concern. It affected a large number of countries with the rise of obeisity. In Fast Food Nation it stated that that the United States has the highest obesisty rate of any industrialized nation in the world. More than half of all American children are now obeise or overwheight. According to nutritionist James O. Hill, America got the fattest, least fit generation of kids ever. Although people know that Mcdonalds is unhealthy, they tend to eat it. Mcdonalds still make their money. And that's another symbol of power, because the american people and people from other countries still eats it knowing that its bad for them. Obeisity rates rises and so does Mcdonalds money.